it doesn't make sense, but the dilf chaser in me wants the father figure SO badly. like you made him so attractive and for what? this was sooooooo amazing!!!!!!!
Meeting wild Kestral was literally just Squidward yelling "OH NO HE'S HOT!!" and I have a feeling he's powerful or important and he's gonna do something at the parley...
I enjoyed it honestly way too much, I NEED MORE, but I know how difficult it is to write such a compelling and beautifully complex story. If anything, having being so enchanted by it, since I read all the available chapters in just a few hours, says lots about how great it is.
Such fun and lovely writing! I'm sorry to say the bad guy is gonna get me good, and the only reason I haven't been got yet is bc I ran out of words to read. So excited to see what you're cooking!
woaw i just played through everything thus far and this is sooo good! i very much enjoy the depth of every character, and how the world feels three dimensional. i esp love erebus, there's just something so endearing abt them.
Finally manage to have some time to read through the update and all I could say is... WOW! the storytelling, the writings, the characters is just-
I'm speechless, wordless, I just need to know when the next part is coming soon so I could go back to this world you're creating. Thanks for that btw, and please do take your time~
haven't finished it fully (Should be sleeping as I feed horses on the weekends and have work but uhm oh well!!)
I found a bug BUT I cannot for the life of me figure out how to upload Images/screenshots/whatever on comments?! Surprising comming from a chronically online 18 Y/O but eh not everyone is smart
But here it is while talking to the kestral the second time: " "[[Isn't that kind of pathetic? That you let the seelie decide that kind of thing for you?" |7.20][8 +=1]]" " and then the choice is unable to be picked
the other two choices Are able to be picked unlike the first one, don't exactly remember the choices I picked but I can always go back and check too if that helps :) (ignore any spelling mistakes its 1am (^^``)
No worries, someone's already shown this to me, so I know what you're talking about! Thanks for the bug report though. I'll be uploading a cleaned up version soon.
I don't recall making a comment for this IF yet so it's time it gets another positive review because the author deserves it!
I love the lore involving the fae and the supernatural - I love the MC relationship to (BAMF DILF) Carter LOL but seriously I think it's super sweet and I love the dynamic of an adoptee parent taking on a child with "baggage" (supernatural powers, unknown past, etc)
The RO's are distinct and I'd love to romance each one - the kestrel is incredibly compelling (which if that isn't fitting for a fae character idk what is) but my heart has chosen Renard and I'll stick to my lovely witch
SMALL SPOILERS FOR CHAPTER 7
I'm curious how many readers chose the deal with the kestrel or not - and how big of a consequence or reward they'll get from that action (I chose to accept and revealing that to everyone was actually so nerve wracking as if I was the MC lol - but again Carter was a sweet dad)
I am so enjoying this story, it has everything I like: magic, mystery, supernatural elements/creatures AND ROMANCE. So far the chapters were very interesting and I can't wait to read the next episode!
Ps: Why did you have to make all three love interests so attractive...
Wow I love Zander, I can't wait to hear more of his story! Also a small note, there are a couple grammatical/sentence errors for selected they/them pronouns, for example; In the scene where Carter suggests MC can see more than Renard, he says "They does that."
I'm aware of the grammar problems with the they/them pronouns. I've been going back and fixing them bit by bit and trying to be more conscious of not making them in the future.
Edit to add: I'm really glad you're enjoying the story and you'll learn a little more about Z in chapter 7.
My tastes are so predictable. I see a hot, snarky and clearly suspicious person and I want to kiss them silly. R, my darling, come here. 😻
Love everything so far, and the balance of mc powers feels just right - strong, but not op with plenty of room to develop. Can't wait to see if my theories on their past pay off. 👀
Love the ROs to bits, fascinating and beautiful people that they are, but I can't help but pick the options that let me hang out with Papa Bear Carter 😂😂😂
I really, really like Renard, but I adore Kestrel.
Loved every interaction with them.
I was wondering if the last released Chapter released was the 5. Because I saw on your Tumblr that you were working on Chapter 7, and I was confused/wondering if I missed the 6th Chapter, lol.
Can't wait to see more of the story/characters and I'm (not so secretly) hoping that the MC isn't just human.
I just looked at the Development log and the last in the List is Chapter 5. Honestly, I didn't look that much at the chapters when a new one started, so maybe I missed it. If that's the case, I'm sorry :(
Never have a played an IF that had me foaming at the mouth biting the walls and climbing on the ceiling for More than one RO (R and kestrel watch out 😻)
I LOVE KESTREL WHAT HTE HFUICK. spoiledsweet i lvoe this IF please take my hoarded coupons and treat urself to a drink or smth IDK i hopw YOU YOUUUU YOUUUU have a GOOOD LIFE. pls i love this
It seems like there's a very very small mistake in the code with Z's gender. I don't know, and it's not a big deal, but I figured I'd let you know anyway. Sorry if I'm mistaken.
This was so good! I enjoyed everything about it—the characters, the dialogue, the pacing, everything was very well done. I really enjoyed playing the MC; while they’re (understandably) ignorant of the supernatural world and what’s happening, they’re not flighty or helpless. That balance is difficult to do well and you wrote it beautifully. I also appreciate the many options you give to the players. I’m looking forward to reading what comes next!
loved the update, it was so so amazing :D the Kestrel seems like a mischievous Loki Fae. I'm looking forward to the next update :D take care, stay safe and hydrated, wish you the best for everything <3
I honestly think you could settle for dialog tags/tone indicators rather than symbols, you have too much. I get symbols for flirt and friendly options but adding in even more symbols for tone of voice gets complicated and confusing.
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I like how you write the mc here. especially when mc and carter talks after talking to renard in chapter 2. it's really like me and my dad talking
the relationship banter between Renard and mc is like hyunjae and yoojin TT i like this so much, keep going author
it doesn't make sense, but the dilf chaser in me wants the father figure SO badly. like you made him so attractive and for what? this was sooooooo amazing!!!!!!!
i maybe liked it too much.. ik it's kinda hard to produce things like this but keep trying your best!1!1! i love it sm, can't wait for chapter 8 tbh.
Meeting wild Kestral was literally just Squidward yelling "OH NO HE'S HOT!!" and I have a feeling he's powerful or important and he's gonna do something at the parley...
I enjoyed it honestly way too much, I NEED MORE, but I know how difficult it is to write such a compelling and beautifully complex story. If anything, having being so enchanted by it, since I read all the available chapters in just a few hours, says lots about how great it is.
Such fun and lovely writing! I'm sorry to say the bad guy is gonna get me good, and the only reason I haven't been got yet is bc I ran out of words to read. So excited to see what you're cooking!
woaw i just played through everything thus far and this is sooo good! i very much enjoy the depth of every character, and how the world feels three dimensional. i esp love erebus, there's just something so endearing abt them.
Finally manage to have some time to read through the update and all I could say is... WOW! the storytelling, the writings, the characters is just-
I'm speechless, wordless, I just need to know when the next part is coming soon so I could go back to this world you're creating. Thanks for that btw, and please do take your time~
AA AN UPDATE I REPEAT AN UPDATE YAY
haven't finished it fully (Should be sleeping as I feed horses on the weekends and have work but uhm oh well!!)
I found a bug BUT I cannot for the life of me figure out how to upload Images/screenshots/whatever on comments?! Surprising comming from a chronically online 18 Y/O but eh not everyone is smart
But here it is while talking to the kestral the second time: " "[[Isn't that kind of pathetic? That you let the seelie decide that kind of thing for you?" |7.20][8 +=1]]" " and then the choice is unable to be picked
the other two choices Are able to be picked unlike the first one, don't exactly remember the choices I picked but I can always go back and check too if that helps :) (ignore any spelling mistakes its 1am (^^``)
No worries, someone's already shown this to me, so I know what you're talking about! Thanks for the bug report though. I'll be uploading a cleaned up version soon.
this story is so fun and interesting!! i can't wait for more!
I don't recall making a comment for this IF yet so it's time it gets another positive review because the author deserves it!
I love the lore involving the fae and the supernatural - I love the MC relationship to (BAMF DILF) Carter LOL but seriously I think it's super sweet and I love the dynamic of an adoptee parent taking on a child with "baggage" (supernatural powers, unknown past, etc)
The RO's are distinct and I'd love to romance each one - the kestrel is incredibly compelling (which if that isn't fitting for a fae character idk what is) but my heart has chosen Renard and I'll stick to my lovely witch
SMALL SPOILERS FOR CHAPTER 7
I'm curious how many readers chose the deal with the kestrel or not - and how big of a consequence or reward they'll get from that action (I chose to accept and revealing that to everyone was actually so nerve wracking as if I was the MC lol - but again Carter was a sweet dad)
this is all to say consider supporting the author on Patreon!
Thank you for the lovely note!
I am so enjoying this story, it has everything I like: magic, mystery, supernatural elements/creatures AND ROMANCE. So far the chapters were very interesting and I can't wait to read the next episode!
Ps: Why did you have to make all three love interests so attractive...
Guess your only option is to do three playthroughs lol
Renard appearance has me thinking of alucard.
You 🤌 are 🤌 not 🤌 alone 🤌
omg from which season and ep it is?
Wow I love Zander, I can't wait to hear more of his story! Also a small note, there are a couple grammatical/sentence errors for selected they/them pronouns, for example; In the scene where Carter suggests MC can see more than Renard, he says "They does that."
I'm aware of the grammar problems with the they/them pronouns. I've been going back and fixing them bit by bit and trying to be more conscious of not making them in the future.
Edit to add: I'm really glad you're enjoying the story and you'll learn a little more about Z in chapter 7.
I PLAY TO QUICKKK but im so glad for the ch 6 update this is TOO GOOD
This is freaking good.
I humbly await the updates .
Moreeeeeee.
Thank you in advance ☺️
My tastes are so predictable. I see a hot, snarky and clearly suspicious person and I want to kiss them silly. R, my darling, come here. 😻
Love everything so far, and the balance of mc powers feels just right - strong, but not op with plenty of room to develop. Can't wait to see if my theories on their past pay off. 👀
You are not alone lol
Being presented a hot and "annoying" person is exquisite
i absolutely ADORE carter! shooting for zander but i need to know the lore behind carter and zander because im very curious👀 loved the update!!
Carter is best dad 🥺
Love the ROs to bits, fascinating and beautiful people that they are, but I can't help but pick the options that let me hang out with
Papa BearCarter 😂😂😂I love him so much- 😭😭😭😭
You know, in theory I knew how popular Carter would be, but the response to him has been wild. I love it that you guys love him so much.
I really, really like Renard, but I adore Kestrel.
Loved every interaction with them.
I was wondering if the last released Chapter released was the 5. Because I saw on your Tumblr that you were working on Chapter 7, and I was confused/wondering if I missed the 6th Chapter, lol.
Can't wait to see more of the story/characters and I'm (not so secretly) hoping that the MC isn't just human.
Chapter 6 should be available to you? Let me know if you're having trouble accessing it.
I just looked at the Development log and the last in the List is Chapter 5. Honestly, I didn't look that much at the chapters when a new one started, so maybe I missed it. If that's the case, I'm sorry :(
Oh no worries hon! Yeah i dont quite know why it does that with the devlog, but 6 is available now.
$rheshse, my favorite character.
All bugs set aside, I'm loving the story so far.
I love this game sm😭🙏
No words to describe how much i love this ^^
Never have a played an IF that had me foaming at the mouth biting the walls and climbing on the ceiling for More than one RO (R and kestrel watch out 😻)
hello??? i NEED more?? now???????
THIS IS AWESOME!!!!!
this was great, can't wait for more!
I LOVE KESTREL WHAT HTE HFUICK. spoiledsweet i lvoe this IF please take my hoarded coupons and treat urself to a drink or smth IDK i hopw YOU YOUUUU YOUUUU have a GOOOD LIFE. pls i love this
Can't wait for next chapter! This is so goooddd
Honestly can't wait for more
Looking forward to this
Great stuff :D
glad you enjoyed it!
I'm obsessed with Rowan. She can bite me and I won't even complain.
This entire concept is great! Looking forward to more :)
cool stuff so far, but
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i encountered so.e dialogue anout how someone could have done harm while under effects of the wine, even when i chose "no drinky wine" option
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Thank you
Just finished the chapter.
From brief interaction with Kestrel, gotta say they seem fun :D.
Can't wait for more.
Fresh playthrough started today
Broken variable.
Save:
https://gofile.io/d/DMEKSt
Wrong name
Save:
https://gofile.io/d/aLE9cL
Broken variable
Save:
https://gofile.io/d/mSfJlH
Didn't drink the wine
Save:
https://gofile.io/d/gIdCeG
Then? Wrong word?
Save:
https://gofile.io/d/cauiLu
It seems like there's a very very small mistake in the code with Z's gender. I don't know, and it's not a big deal, but I figured I'd let you know anyway. Sorry if I'm mistaken.
ooh! Thank you for pointing this out! It's the wrong variable altogether which is why it's messing up (it's the variable for kestrel's gender)
This was so good! I enjoyed everything about it—the characters, the dialogue, the pacing, everything was very well done. I really enjoyed playing the MC; while they’re (understandably) ignorant of the supernatural world and what’s happening, they’re not flighty or helpless. That balance is difficult to do well and you wrote it beautifully. I also appreciate the many options you give to the players. I’m looking forward to reading what comes next!
Thank you! I'm so glad you enjoyed it!
loved the update, it was so so amazing :D the Kestrel seems like a mischievous
LokiFae. I'm looking forward to the next update :D take care, stay safe and hydrated, wish you the best for everything <3Thank you, love! Im glad you enjoyed the chapter!
I honestly think you could settle for dialog tags/tone indicators rather than symbols, you have too much. I get symbols for flirt and friendly options but adding in even more symbols for tone of voice gets complicated and confusing.
I appreciate the input ☺️