It seems like there's a very very small mistake in the code with Z's gender. I don't know, and it's not a big deal, but I figured I'd let you know anyway. Sorry if I'm mistaken.
This was so good! I enjoyed everything about it—the characters, the dialogue, the pacing, everything was very well done. I really enjoyed playing the MC; while they’re (understandably) ignorant of the supernatural world and what’s happening, they’re not flighty or helpless. That balance is difficult to do well and you wrote it beautifully. I also appreciate the many options you give to the players. I’m looking forward to reading what comes next!
loved the update, it was so so amazing :D the Kestrel seems like a mischievous Loki Fae. I'm looking forward to the next update :D take care, stay safe and hydrated, wish you the best for everything <3
I honestly think you could settle for dialog tags/tone indicators rather than symbols, you have too much. I get symbols for flirt and friendly options but adding in even more symbols for tone of voice gets complicated and confusing.
This is really interesting so far and I'm excited to see where it goes!
My only little note is that the section at the end of chapter 3 immediately following "Renard answers you only with a quiet, shuddering breath." has such a long wait in between the text and the next button showing up I thought there was some kind of glitch/the demo had abruptly ended.
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I'm obsessed with Rowan. She can bite me and I won't even complain.
This entire concept is great! Looking forward to more :)
cool stuff so far, but
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i encountered so.e dialogue anout how someone could have done harm while under effects of the wine, even when i chose "no drinky wine" option
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Thank you
Just finished the chapter.
From brief interaction with Kestrel, gotta say they seem fun :D.
Can't wait for more.
Fresh playthrough started today
Broken variable.
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Wrong name
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Broken variable
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Didn't drink the wine
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Then? Wrong word?
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It seems like there's a very very small mistake in the code with Z's gender. I don't know, and it's not a big deal, but I figured I'd let you know anyway. Sorry if I'm mistaken.
ooh! Thank you for pointing this out! It's the wrong variable altogether which is why it's messing up (it's the variable for kestrel's gender)
This was so good! I enjoyed everything about it—the characters, the dialogue, the pacing, everything was very well done. I really enjoyed playing the MC; while they’re (understandably) ignorant of the supernatural world and what’s happening, they’re not flighty or helpless. That balance is difficult to do well and you wrote it beautifully. I also appreciate the many options you give to the players. I’m looking forward to reading what comes next!
Thank you! I'm so glad you enjoyed it!
loved the update, it was so so amazing :D the Kestrel seems like a mischievous
LokiFae. I'm looking forward to the next update :D take care, stay safe and hydrated, wish you the best for everything <3Thank you, love! Im glad you enjoyed the chapter!
I honestly think you could settle for dialog tags/tone indicators rather than symbols, you have too much. I get symbols for flirt and friendly options but adding in even more symbols for tone of voice gets complicated and confusing.
I appreciate the input ☺️
Wasn't there a 4th romance option? Did they get removed?
No, you may be thinking of a different story. In the description i do mention possibly adding a fourth but nothing concrete.
welp. rowan can step on me. im obsessed
This made me scream laugh lol. Thanks for reading!
This is really interesting so far and I'm excited to see where it goes!
My only little note is that the section at the end of chapter 3 immediately following "Renard answers you only with a quiet, shuddering breath." has such a long wait in between the text and the next button showing up I thought there was some kind of glitch/the demo had abruptly ended.
lol I've heard this complaint a few times. It'll be changed with the next update, promise.